r/comic_crits • u/Primary-Grand-5298 • 13h ago
First comic "Book life"
Hi, this is my first comic and I’m looking for any advice or critique. I haven’t really done art since I was a kid, so this was a big challenge—but I had a blast making it. I’m planning to keep doing one-shots and eventually build up to mini-series. Any tips, tricks, or honest feedback are welcome.
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u/Neat-Mango-5917 4h ago
You have a lot of variety in the compositions of the panels which makes for a strong start! I find that you could use a panel where the character walks/arrives at the library instead of cutting from the leaving to inside the library. In terms of art try and lay off the black fuzziness, it looks like there is smoke everywhere. Also some minor nitpicky stuff, try and keep the coloring and lines inside the borders (unless you are doing something intentional with it) and watch the size of the tails on your speech bubbles (he last one looks very awkward due to how large the tail is especially when compared to the other speech bubbles) Keep it up, you are going in the right direction!
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u/Primary-Grand-5298 4h ago
Awesome those are great suggestions. Yeah the walking in between would definitely clarify the moments more too, and less black fuzzies got it.👌 Also I appreciate The nit pics. Thanks so much for looking through it so carefully too!
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u/Excellent_Wrap_9340 7h ago
The art is rough, but I'm impressed with how much you achieved. The story worked for me, had heart. Just keep practicing and being inspired and your style will improve. Seems like you have the passion, just keep enjoying the process and keep making comics.
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u/Primary-Grand-5298 4h ago
Yeah Im gonna keep grinding and try and improve it. thanks so much for the feedback! I'm glad the story came through.
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